Sarah says, "I thought i'd have a go....
I've used what you've done on the bulletin makeover... and tweaked it a bit...
the way i've layed it out should actually help the eye travel across all the information, where as in the original there was no real path. I've also increased the white space."
Thanks Sarah. Great job!
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If I was going to have a go the first thing I'd do is remove the exclamation marks. You should never ever use them! If your sentence requires an exclamation mark for emphasis it's a poorly written sentence and they're just a little bit primary school...
Spoken like a true! journalist! - maybe you could give us some tips for church copy-writers?
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